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I have been building my wife's website since June and believe I am ready for a constructive review.  All comments would be appreciated.

The site is at http://www.BirdladyOfEaston.com

Thanks,

Mike

Well done!  The only thing i noticed that under your store picture you have saturdays  time, at first i thought that was the only day open til i read down the page.     But nice.     just opened my web site   www.jbsfamilystore.com

It looks great. Here are some thing I noticed:
You have "Closed Sunday" but you don't have the store hours for the rest of the week. I have to go to a whole other page to view them. I would either get rid of the Sunday comment or put the hours on the main page and use the other strictly as a contact us.

"About" It needs to say and the monitor stuck. |

Have you though about Lightbox?

The favicon only works for the main page.

Hope it helps, good luck in all that you do.

The site is very informative and not a lot of clutter  ao that is good but your header doesn't quite line up with the body.. the 3 larger photos of the toys look really similar so i might only use one and make it bigger. I am guessing you don't sell online but you might want to state that somewhere.

Thank you as well as woodstar and joe b.

I didn't realize the day (which I change every day) would be confusing.  I will be eliminating it in the next day or two.
I orginally wanted the pictures to "lead" people to the differnt sections but I now see how they could be causing various issues.

I will put your input to good use.

 Mike Seip, Sr.

The site has lots of nice touches and I’d bet it has a lot of appeal for all the bird lovers out there. I have a few suggestions that might add a little polish.

First would be on your Home page, since your name is so prominent in the header, I think you could delete it from the top of the page and promote what it is you actually offer – the exotic birds, boarding and clipping, etc. It’s great to see your location and phone in a good spot; amazing how many sites don’t do that.

Next I would find a good proofreader to go over the site for you. I saw a lot of little typos and spelling errors. For instance, in this sentence on your Home page, I’m thinking there are at least a couple of words missing:  "Cages of all sizes including those for parakeets up large cages for the Macaws.  I will assist you in making the best choice meet the needs of your bird AND your home." A couple of lines down from that you have Luther “wannts” instead of “wants.” Those kinds of errors make your site seem unprofessional and are easy to clean up.

Another suggestion would be to rethink how you’ve set up your About the Birdlady page. The text starts out in third person and then moves into first person at the bottom. I think I would make the page one way or the other … or pull out the statement from Mel in a box so it is more obvious what’s going on.

So there are a few ideas for you. Good luck!

Liz

Hello, I had a little free time and checked out your site again!  I like it. With this free time i went though your home page and came up with some changes to help if you would like:    BELOW   let me know   joeb   www.jbsfamilystore.com

• The Easton - Phillipsburg area's newest Specialty Bird Store
• Exotic Birds      Blue & Gold Macaw’s, Umbrella Cockatoo’s, African Grey Parrots and 
       with new arrivals everyday.  We welcome all to stop in and visit with us. Feel free to
•      hold and cuddled our special babies. They love it!
  
  
•      When your comfortable and ready to come in and buy your special bird, our goal is to help
•      match the buyer and bird to each other. We at Birdlady Of Easton just don’t sell a bird to
•      become a display item. We believe a bird should become a member of your family for the rest
•      of their life.
     
  .
• Abba seed  Pellet diets  Millet spray     Don’t forget to visit our expanded Seed and Pellet
•      Section. Yes, apparently a competitor has been “misinforming” others that we do not carry the
       Abba line of seed products. THIS IS INCORRECT!  We personally invite you to visit us
      and see our selection of Abba Seed and other fine products that we maintain in stock.
         [Click to view my SEED page]
  .
• Avian Photography by Melissa    We invite you to look at Melissa’s photos that are displayed though out
•       the store.
        Melissa's recently had her photos displayed at the Family Y Gallery in Easton.
  .
• Cages   We carry all sizes of cages, from small for parakeets up large cages for the Macaws.  We will be
        glad to assist you in making the best choice that meets the needs of your bird and your home.
  .
•       Easton carry’s a wide range and assortment of toys and cage accessories for your special friend.

•      Luther would like to remind you of these EXTRAS at Birdlady Of Easton -
                              Click the oval to see what I give you FREE
                                      
• Save Gas - Buy Local  
  Now is the best time to buy local as the increase in fuel costs continues to escalate.  A
  short trip to Birdlady of Easton can be less expensive than purchasing on the Internet and paying the Fuel Surcharge of up to 9.8% from UPS / FedEX and DHL.

If this was a help I will be glad to go to your next section.    joeb

Thanks Liz,

This week-end I will proof-read each page.  I agree 100% that any typos detracts from the professionalism of a site.  I repeated the name only to give balance to the address etc but I understand the redundancy detracts from the message as well as uses space. 

Thanks for the great input!

Regards,

Mike

Joe b:

THANKS!  I will defintely use some of your verbage and your copy makes the whole site seem more personal and one-on-one with the potential customer.  I also had an opportunity to click the link to your site and must say it is very clean and straight forward.  Questions on payment accepted and how you ship are answered in very little space with graphics.

Thanks,
Mike

Jann1033:

Thanks for giving me an idea of what threw the page out of alignment.  By taking your suggetion I have been able to get everything back in line.

Regards,
Mike

Thanks Mike

 I never thought of more detail on payment, thank will do!   joeb

I like it.  Mike you left the "L" out of goal   and  down on page "from" is misspelled.    Looks Good!   joeb

Hi mike Here is some more.      Joeb

Great News!

A unique service has been added to The Birdlady Easton store.

Photos by Melissa

The new service has taken off and has had a great outcome with our customers.

 So! Hurry in and set up your appointment for a photo session with Photos by Melissa.

 Melissa will be offering a number of special offers and service's to you in the very near future.

Melissa has developed a very special ability to have your bird "pose" for  the camera. While other bird stores offer pictures of birds. Melissa brings a whole other level of photography and creates a work-of-art for you to cherish for years to come.  Some of Melissa's work was recently on display in the Gallery at the Family YMCA of Easton, Phillipsburg & Vicinity in Easton, PA.

Pictures are normally available within three business days. Melissa offers a wide range of styled frames in different sizes.  For those ordering multiple pictures and sizes, Melissa offers a special priced package. You may contact Melissa for additional information at Melissa@BirdladyOfEaston.com .

don't forget to add picture back    www.jbsfamilystore.com

Thanks Joe B,

This week will be hectic for me but I will try to revise the page.  I really appreciate your assistance.

Mike